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Title: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: King steevy on January 11, 2016, 08:38:29 PM

The night is dark , sad as my heart.
I feel the drum flying as my dreams
My soul is trippin under nowhere
You are gone without a goodbye
Leavin? me alone in the dark.

Everyday is a fight to forget your absence.
Everynight is a reminisce of your presence.
Your were the shape of my life.
Sort of beautiful light in my loneliness.

I heard that they take care of you in heaven.
I sometimes smell your perfume in church.
My angel is what you were born to become.
Even if in this human world :
I still feel alone as the dark.

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: throwintheTAL on January 11, 2016, 08:40:44 PM

This is wack

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: fedswatchin on January 11, 2016, 08:42:05 PM

Talk about bland writing

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: King steevy on January 11, 2016, 08:42:57 PM

Quote from: plaquesofplatinum on January 11, 2016, 08:40:44 PM
This is wack

oh thank you for reading..
i felt that too.
it's been a while that I hadn't written..

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: ∧ ∨ ∩ ∪ on January 11, 2016, 08:43:12 PM

Awe I hope God brings you through the rain and stuff.

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: FAMÈ on January 11, 2016, 08:44:25 PM

Quote from: plaquesofplatinum on January 11, 2016, 08:40:44 PM
This is wack

!!!

What kinda cliche mess..

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: leftout on January 11, 2016, 08:44:30 PM

You have no natural writing ability

The transitions were off kilter and the phrasing :uhh: nigga

R u illiterate?

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: King steevy on January 11, 2016, 08:45:23 PM

Quote from: leftout on January 11, 2016, 08:44:30 PM
You have no natural writing ability

this is the most untrue thing that someone ever Told Me. lol
but thank you.

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: King steevy on January 11, 2016, 08:47:17 PM

maybe you can translate this..

"Que veux tu que je te dise?...
Que veux-tu que je te dise

Des mots pour apaiser tes peurs
Je les ai vendu au march? aux dupes
L? o? tout a commenc?

Que veux-tu que je te dise

J?ai ador? la petite seconde
Qui a tout fait bascul?
Comme j?ai maudis l??ternit?
Qui s?est progressivement install?e
Avec son insupportable monotonie
L??nergie m?a d?sert? la foi aussi
Tes yeux ont perdu de toi
Cette beaut? pure et myst?rieuse
Pour laquelle j?ai sacrifi? la raison

Que veux-tu que je te dise

Qu?? trop vouloir des gages
L?oiseau finit par s??vader de sa cage
Et trouver des charmes insoup?onn?s
A la jungle infest?e de pr?dateurs
Qui roucoulent dans les bois obscurs

Que veux-tu que je te dise

Oui je t?aime
A la fois trop et pas assez.."

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: Marilyn on January 11, 2016, 08:52:56 PM

,kfd

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: mauza on January 11, 2016, 08:57:01 PM

Quote from: H??R J?RD∆Ń on January 11, 2016, 08:43:12 PM
Awe I hope God brings you through the rain and stuff.

!

Like a rainbow shinning through the sky / After my heart drowned into the night

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: mauza on January 11, 2016, 08:58:03 PM

Quote from: King steevy on January 11, 2016, 08:47:17 PM
maybe you can translate this..

"Que veux tu que je te dise?...
Que veux-tu que je te dise

Des mots pour apaiser tes peurs
Je les ai vendu au march? aux dupes
L? o? tout a commenc?

Que veux-tu que je te dise

J?ai ador? la petite seconde
Qui a tout fait bascul?
Comme j?ai maudis l??ternit?
Qui s?est progressivement install?e
Avec son insupportable monotonie
L??nergie m?a d?sert? la foi aussi
Tes yeux ont perdu de toi
Cette beaut? pure et myst?rieuse
Pour laquelle j?ai sacrifi? la raison

Que veux-tu que je te dise

Qu?? trop vouloir des gages
L?oiseau finit par s??vader de sa cage
Et trouver des charmes insoup?onn?s
A la jungle infest?e de pr?dateurs
Qui roucoulent dans les bois obscurs

Que veux-tu que je te dise

Oui je t?aime
A la fois trop et pas assez.."

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: leftout on January 11, 2016, 08:59:58 PM

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If ur an alien, i need you off my planet (http://imageshack.com/a/img11/9193/rsr.gif)

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: BAPHOMET. on January 11, 2016, 09:03:45 PM

Quote from: leftout on January 11, 2016, 08:59:58 PM
(http://s30.postimg.org/yggl55hm9/56467410152127265075601.jpg)

If ur an alien, i need you off my planet (http://imageshack.com/a/img11/9193/rsr.gif)

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Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: Code Red: itsMista on January 11, 2016, 09:04:06 PM

Quote from: King steevy on January 11, 2016, 08:42:57 PM
Quote from: plaquesofplatinum on January 11, 2016, 08:40:44 PM
This is wack
oh thank you for reading..
i felt that too.
it's been a while that I hadn't written..

Exactly. He read it tho

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: King steevy on January 11, 2016, 09:04:27 PM

Quote from: leftout on January 11, 2016, 08:59:58 PM
(http://s30.postimg.org/yggl55hm9/56467410152127265075601.jpg)

If ur an alien, i need you off my planet (http://imageshack.com/a/img11/9193/rsr.gif)

this is mean and so funny and Iconic at the same time.
love you for this...

it's as iconic as this board.

#legend.

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: SUPREME on January 11, 2016, 09:05:19 PM

Quote from: leftout on January 11, 2016, 08:59:58 PM
(http://s30.postimg.org/yggl55hm9/56467410152127265075601.jpg)

If ur an alien, i need you off my planet (http://imageshack.com/a/img11/9193/rsr.gif)

SSSSDSSSSSSSSD

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: Cece Winans on January 11, 2016, 09:06:56 PM

This sucks, but try again sweetie

Let god work with you cause you damn sure can't do it yourself

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: SUPREME on January 11, 2016, 09:08:08 PM

Yeah this sucks

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: FRANCE on January 11, 2016, 09:56:44 PM

I started cackling before I even entered the thread. No point in reading.

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: GLOCK on January 11, 2016, 10:18:01 PM

U slayed this

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: Ｂｏｏｍｚ on January 11, 2016, 10:20:40 PM

vvf

glock shut up

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: GLOCK on January 11, 2016, 10:25:19 PM

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Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: Scott. on January 12, 2016, 03:35:55 AM

Smh. Y'all are so mean.

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: ∧ ∨ ∩ ∪ on January 12, 2016, 04:23:51 AM

He wanted to be read. These faggots always want attention. Ugly selves

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: SUPREME on January 12, 2016, 08:11:37 AM

Quote from: H??R J?RD∆Ń on January 12, 2016, 04:23:51 AM
He wanted to be read. These faggots always want attention. Ugly selves

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Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: Herb. on January 12, 2016, 08:32:34 AM

beautiful.

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: death on January 12, 2016, 08:56:47 AM

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u fags have no manners

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: SUPREME on January 12, 2016, 09:01:02 AM

(https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/236x/41/88/43/418843bf01e478286ef0030caf562d5d.jpg)

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: rosone1 on January 12, 2016, 09:34:15 AM

Good job.I know this is just for personal expression however, the style of writing in the first few lines of the last stanza, contrast the style used in the rest.That kinda broke the flow.

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: Herb. on January 12, 2016, 10:10:51 AM

did u just call me a ho

Title: Re: Alone In the Dark ( a poem that i wrote)
Post by: garlic on January 12, 2016, 11:12:01 AM

was this about someone who passed away? the part where you are "still smelling" their perfume in the church. are you remembering someone?

Brandy Source

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