I didn't mince anything hun
If not this.. then clearly ur desiring some wordy .. poetic .. india Arie.. or Diane warren type shit. That ain't Bran ..
She's not in that space.. so get over it
Every snippet has had a different vibe .. different subject
How about u wait until the full project before u lash her writing abilities and pretend ur an editor from rolling stone
You are entitled to your opinion... I just happen to think ur jumping the gun and not even giving her abilities as a writer a fair chance.